ElaBrave

Thanks for the reviews everyone! I understand what you're saying, June and Juliet (lovely name, by the way :smt001 ), and will edit the poem in due course. Thankyou for ...

Hi again :smt001 The lack of punctuation is basically the only problem here, I've included it in bold , any other problem words I've put in bold with my explanation ...

Hi there :smt001 The things I'm not sure of I've put in bold and my comments and suggestions are in brackets. The main dilemma is the lack of punctuation at ...

Losing Faith In memory of Father Louis Blondele (1939-2009) Remaining optimistic In a country where killings rise Is undoubtedly a challenge; Like seeing with smoke in your eyes. - How ...

Hi JD, I don't keep track of my times; that's how laid back I am about it :thud: But what's yours?

Hello Explosive Pen (I see you're being called "El"). I've never had a physics brain and I don't take physics, so I believe every word of that poem because I ...

:smt001 Hi Ranger Hawk. I haven't read anything from the Ranger's Apprentice series, but I will keep my eyes open for the books now - thanks. :) I also love ...

Hi there :smt001 I've underlined the bits I'm not sure about and my explanations and suggestions are in brackets. Leaning (Leaning [i]in sounds better) to hug me, i (make it ...

Hi all. I find myself on the verge of being overwhelmed by the responses in such quick succession! It gives me a warm fuzzy feeling inside :smt003 I'll try answer ...

That's very kind, thankyou.

Thanks! I made some adjustments. I hope it sounds better.

I'm not going to crit you as it's already been done, but GOOD POEM! I like it!

Hey there! Just a few things: (The word/s I wasn't sure of I put in bold and my explanation/suggestion in brackets.) All she had was all she was gonna get ...

I briefly skimmed through the previous responses, but have decided to remain unprejudiced in my thoughts of "hopeless hope". Don't worry, it's a good thing! I really like your poem. ...

As "twilight tiger" said - fantastic imagery. I could picture the scene very vividly, due to your powerful usage of words. In a way, I guess your poem could be ...