Eimear

Heya. A poem perhaps? Many thanks, Eimear

Ahh! Love that little rhyme!

I could twist and toss this feeling, or throw it to the wind, alas still, like your lingering presence It will be there, etched on my eyelids when I close ...

Will review in the morning. Here's my promise. Eimear

Why did this speak to me so much? I can't even really see many mistakes with it? Even the 'average' language seems to be powerfully fitting. I loved it. Truly, ...

Whoa! This topic's old. Ha- in both senses. Well I guess you've already revised this or maybe even forgotten about it but I've started so I'll finish...bit cliched, bit repetitive, ...

This really is very good. Why doesn't it have anymore stars? You have potiental. Where have you been all my life? I loved this! It's got me all excited. The ...

Interesting concept nonetheless. Telling us rather than showing aside, I'm intregued. Why does the poet not like Thursdays? A got a vibe of exams or something to that effect. Don't ...

Hey, so finally got round to reviewing this. I read it, meant to comment and then wandered off to do something else so...here I am! Alright, phew, here goes. It's ...

This reads very stilted. The overuse of 'she' brings down a well written piece. She was a great beauty, she was alive. She was human, she laughed and she cried. ...

Hey, is a poem alright for a critque? If you can at all here's the link Many thanks. Eimear

*So for the contest we had to personify a bed, and here's my shot. We lined to attention, on polished floors and covered in clean sheets, to greet the mourners. ...

Powerful. Took me a couple of reads to understand it properly, which is always a good thing in my book. And good on you for writing about a topical issue. ...

Ooo. I liked this, pure and simple. It made me go all shivery for some reason. I think it's good now, but you could make it great by trying to ...

It's a bit self-concious to work as a short poem. There's no real ownership, and it gives the impression that it's been wrote in a hurry. It just seems rushed ...