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I liked this. This overall concept brought a new spin on performers and their fans. However I felt that there were a few things that brought it down. 1. Structure- ...

What is life,( You need a question mark to give this energy) A last regret, An open book, A friend recently met. A rising sun, A darkened moon, A battle ...

Lyrical Sunshine, in response to a much eariler comment... My Friend: Do you want to go to a free room? Me: I'd much rather stay here- have you seen Josh? ...

The offense (haha like this storybook) had disintergreted into chaos. Forget choas. It was utter, utter pandamonium. Nicholas closed his eyes for a fraction of a second, a fleeting glimpse ...

Welcome to YWS! I'm pretty much all about the poetry side of things here- although I've written a novel already. So if you need any help PM me! Hope and ...

Hey, D! I don't have much time so this will be as good as I can. Ok, a few things here. 1. Grammer, Punctuation. There's a few mistakes in this ...

Dear Mr. Publisher, I hope my plea isn’t in vain. Please find enclosed a manuscript, written in blue crayon. You see, I don’t follow ‘writing rules’ I break them everyday. ...

It's an interesting concept, isn't it? Sort of like Nationality- if a person moves to a different country and adopts their culture, language, lifestyle and believes that is their homeland, ...

Heya, I'm pretty good at reading poetry so I'll take a look for you. "Love Sea" I feel so lost at his gaze Tears started to run down my face. ...

41- And when people try and pull you up on it simply explain it's a group of children throwing snowballs in a blizzard.

Ghostwriter- Have you seen the panist? Anway, I'll continue! Ted sped on down the rancid carpet of rotting bodies and food that covered the groud of the trench. He was ...

I agree with Gahks and Vernon. You have a loosely bound poem around the theme of (life?) protrayed through a well-worn image of walking through a forest. I want to ...

Hey, I think I've reviewed some of your other works? I see real potiental in them. But, a writer's work is never done haha, there are a few areas for ...

This was quite good. Real potiental. I'll just try and focus on the things that I thought brought it down. 1. The title- 'Last Kiss'. I think the piece is ...

ambercoultis- Yours will be the only exception.