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Hehe 14.5/10? Tell Jeremy to stop stealing golf balls from the driving range

Do you want to know the worst thing about beating through a broken heart? It’s not the torment of bitter sunshine, stinging winds and rising tides-- It’s not being able ...

Hey, whoa I'm kinda tired but I just had to review this before I go to bed. This poem was great for the most part in my opinion, and the ...

Hey neo_almighty, and let me be the first to say welcome to the Young Writers' society. It's a great place to come and develop as a writer and to have ...

The rhyme scheme in this piece earns a gold star from me. It's truly something to be beheld- even the way you slowly worked it around the beautiful yet simple ...

Hey DC622- welcome to YWS. This is a really promising start- the sort of voice that's always good in a prologue. I think I'm going to like reading this. Most ...

I'm with Miz on this one, there's just not enough emotion for me to care about this poem. It also sort of seems like the generic email you get every ...

Hey, don't beat yourself up. Everyone goes through the 'black moment'- just focus on pulling yourself out of it. And never compare your work to anyone elses- how esle would ...

Hey Colleen, this was really helpful. Thanks for posting!

Hey Redwing- I'm with you on the Math thing...I loath it so much. Well, actually it should be I loathed it, seeing as I don't do it anymore. Yay! Okay, ...

Hey Krupp. Hokay- well, Gahks has pretty much picked up on my biggest problem with this piece. There's too much telling- it's just really not subtle enough for my liking. ...

Hey D, sorry it took so long for me to get around to reading this. I'm with lyrical sunshine- this is, the best chapter so far. I'm guessing this is ...

This earns a star in my book for it's enchanting reality, if you catch my drift. I'm going to forget that it has little direction or backbone, simply because I ...

Yeah I agree with most of the posters here, I think you have a good start here to develop it into something deeper. The emotion's there, and it was a ...

Hey Mayfyre (love the name by the way)- welcome to the young writers society! I really do hope you stick around. I'm with kyte. This really is a good begining. ...