Eimear

I'm straining to read this as poetry as well. Although I liked the theme- certainly no emo or overly tragic language used here. Yay! I find it hard to believe ...

"How lovely to see ya again!" Misty shrieks as she and JK rush upstairs. "I love your top! You have new lip gloss? Love it." This is all a little ...

This is good in theory, but there were a few problems with it that just prevented me from enjoying it very much. You tell,tell,tell the story instead of showing us ...

I liked this as well. I was oddly enjoyable to read. However, a word of caution. It;s obvious from this piece that you can indeed use poetic devices and words ...

Ringo_rules has pointed out most of the main typos and grammatical errors with the piece so I won't chase you up on that. Other than the confusion, I think there's ...

Hey, haven't seen you around before. I'm Eimear, pleased to meet you! Ok, onto the poem. The first thing that struck me was that it seemed more like prose than ...

Can’t you see it? We’re changing for the better, day by day, bit by bit. Even moving mountains, Can’t you see it? I’m starting to smile, you’re beginning to laugh. ...

Sorry- I'll probably come back and make this a much longer review later, just while I was reading this there I noticed one line that I would change: I’m walking ...

I've been very bad lately in not reviewing- well, it's actually because I'm in the middle of exams so technically I'm being good....oh, stop jabbering Eimear. Ok, so- what I'm ...

** So this is one of the later songs in my Musical. The singer in the first verse is my main character, Che Fitzgerald who’s made a bond with a ...

Heya, I haven't see you around. I'm Eimear, by the way. Nice to meet you! So I thought this was pretty awesome. A few things bugged me though. Well, not ...

Wow, I really loved this. I can't even really see much wrong with it either (sorry if I'm rather useless in this critique) but I had to leave a comment. ...

I agree with all of Mad's comments. I reads like a boring history list from a textbook. The poem lacks emotion, poetic devices and a sound rhythm or structure. I ...

XD This is quite the troubled rock star's hymn, isn't it? Well I like your work on a whole and I liked this. The stuff I'm writing at the moment ...

Wow, thanks for all the great responses. Right now the reason there's no beat is because these are the raw lyrics without any music. I'm saving up for a keyboard ...