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Impressive, TBR. Very nice. I, too, would like to see more of a reaction to the wife's death, but other than that a good start.

While very creative in its own right, I just couldn't get into it Brad...maybe I'm reading it wrong. I must tell you, I totally empathize though :)

I get the feeling I did something wrong by suddenly switching away from Yurok...:(

I find it really amusing when people try to tell someone their poetry is bad. Poetry can be ANYTHING, dammit. It's only wrong when you set out to do something ...

I couldn’t keep my focus on anything but Donovan and everything that has happened in the past day should be "...everything that HAD happened to me in the past day." ...

personally, I like the old chatroom better

:oops: *is impossibly flattered* Wow TBR, thanks! I really appreciate this...you have no idea. Thank you from the bottom of my heart. --Hunter

Can you people NOT stay on topic!?

Well, the main idea is to prevent whatever would make those two teens horny in the first place, to use your wording. Anything sexually oriented is meant to be shared ...

Midnight, that isn't manslaughter. If you get mad and decide to beat someone to death with a saucepan, you planned to kill them. Just because you didn't spend weeks stalking ...

Well, you didn't give us much to work with..but from what you did give us, it looks pretty good. Certain word choices could be imporved, but that come with time... ...

I like the story so far, especially how you started it. Heroe's being pursued is always a great way to begin a novel--as is a fight scene. Great start, do ...

of course they can! (where'd that come from?) TBR, when are you going to get more of this story up so you can show Sam what the actual training is ...

C) Economics is often included in the death penalty debatet(the one that goes on in the real world), and for good reason. The cost of keeping prisoners for life as ...

no offense Qi, but how can this possibly be a discussion iof you only want people here to agree with you?