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Anytime, pal--always a pleasure to read your stuff! I really should finish Shadow...I'll get to it eventually, I promise! If you want me to crit anything else, hit me up ...

"Walking around inside my head is always really disorienting. I'm really curious to find out what my physical body is doing while I'm walking around in there...it's REALLY weird." "What's ...

*thumbs up* Absolutely--if you have any more stuff you want me to critique, send me a PM; your work is a pleasure to read and edit. --Dono

okay good to know that it doesn't exsist. lol. I like your avatar its pretty cool. Thanks! I drew it myself!

I think, instead of focusing on the old man, it would be cool to focus on the GIRL. Too many stories try to make these kinds of people the victim, ...

Okay, my first comment is the spacing Please double space your paragraphs, that way it is easier to read. My next reaction was confusion. For all the action going on, ...

On a busy commercial street there was a shop. It was tucked away between larger buildings, secluded and dark. Out of the flow of commuters, stepped a tall man in ...

Since guys would almost always INSIST that they don't "cry," I would suggest describing the presence of tears on his cheeks, in his eyes, etc, rather than saying he was ...

SPEW doesn't exist; it's a figment of the Society's very, VERY creative imagination. Welcome, Megster; I am Hunter...or Dono...or Phoenix...Quiz...Hun...Donski...um....yeah, you can pick one if it so

“We should go back now. Master Percevil wants a few of the old manuscripts rewritten.” He stuffed his hand into his pockets and made the long journey back home. The ...

...oh. Well then, jolly good show mate.

Hola Doe-- Astrath’s tattoo was still burning the next day; he dipped his hand into the cool water which made it seem much larger than it actually was. The way ...

The way he's holding his club is awkward...Keeping it straight like that would take alot of effort, lol. He probably should have had it touching the ground with his arm ...

Teehee, Myspace meets YWS!

"Come on, come on..." I whispered under my breath as the horse galloped between my legs. In actuality, I cared nothing for the female drow that went down with Thaden ...