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VIDEO SHOP GUY: A small independent video shop opened up across the road from my house, owned by a nice 30 something man and his mum. I was about seven ...

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“Hi Christie,” Mark greeted her as he raised his hands. That move was the trigger for a high five without saying it. I supposed Christie was reluctant over the whole ...

CHAPTER ONE Once upon a time; in a land, at a time, where and when giants, dwarves, elves and all things alike seceretly incorporated with human living; once lived a ...

It was kind of flat, nothing made it impressive but it had things that made in unsatisfying. "I stare through the wind and water at the melting colors of parked ...

Overall, I think I do like it. Especially the part where you describe her eyes- my favorite. But one thing you missed was clarity. It was like half of the ...

Very nice. I like it.

One word: funny. XD

I like the poem, so emotional. But here are some things that turned me off. “I see the lights dear, I believe it is my time To go home to ...

Well for me, if the quote is quite obvious of who is telling it. Remove the I said or he said. But only do this if there are no additional ...

kind of bring back the early moments of harry potter when it was all not about fighting

Why not try putting space on your next chapters, but good start.

After a stressful day of a chasing gnome, cannibal-teddy bears, creepy wizard-ogre, and some three oversized dwarfs, Rayven had enough! He started his quest of his full of adrenaline waiting ...