Earthfire713

Hi Aristotle! Your story sounds interesting. Are you going to go into more detail about the light invading? To me, it sounds like your trying make light bad and dark ...

I've heard people say that writing in first person is harder than third person. Personally, I think that third person is better for more light hearted books and first person ...

Okay, bear with me because I am not good at poetry at all, but I felt like I had to try and write something like this. This is about my ...

I like this better than your other Prologue, because it draws you in more. It makes the reader start worrying about the main character and they want to read more ...

Wow. This was a great story. You did a good job at drawing me into the action. The only thing that you need to change is try and make the ...

I agree with everyone so far, but what I mainly look for in books is something that appeals to my interests. I'm not really into romance, so mushy books like ...

I like that! It's very funny and your interview format is original! Keep writing!

The car pulled up in front of the two-story brick building, surrounded by manicured green lawns and pine trees. Alexis slumped against the window, staring at it glumly. “Here you ...

Thanks for the reviews! I also have another question: does the non-speaking thing seem too cliched? Should I change it or keep it the way it is?

That was amazing and you had great imagery. I could see everything in my head as it happened. Great job!

Oh, wow, that was creepy and sad at the end. You did a really great job, especially on the first paragraph, which was a great hook. You misspelled a couple ...

Thank you! And just so everyone knows, the reason that this is put in Fantasy Fiction is because I am going to add in some fantasy stuff later.

Can you tell me if this is interesting or not? Also, tell me if I use too many musical terms that aren't understandable. Music Prologue Everyone in the Jacobson family ...

Hi! I just read your story. I liked it, the prologue was interesting and I liked the descriptiveness of your first line. There were just a few misspellings: I screamed, ...

That sounds like a reallly interesting story! Are you going to post any of them on here? That's really amazing that they have a longer word count than Harry Potter. ...