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Re: Masquerade Brothers
**Can I be in this? I've never done a Storybook before and I want to try.**
Apr 22, 2010 -
Re: To tickle your fancy (part 2)
Hi babymagic! This story has a lot of promise. I found several nitpicks, thought, so here goes... "Quickly, we must not be seen," He said. Walking with brisk strides he ...
Apr 21, 2010 -
Re: Life, worth the risk?
I liked this! For a moment, I thought that it should belong in fantasy fiction, but I love the original way of telling this story. Great job!
Apr 21, 2010 -
Re: nothing
Hi W-Lupus! This was an interesting story, and I thought it was more unique than other werewolf stories. I also liked how you mixed in a scientific explanation. :smt001 The ...
Apr 21, 2010 -
Re: My life as a human dreamcatcher Part 2
Hi Ultraviolet! This was an interesting story, and I really want to know more. Here are just some nitpicks I found: I know what your thinking. And you can just ...
Apr 19, 2010 -
Re: Not Too Bright...
Hi fizza! I'm Earthfire. I really liked how you described things so well. I have a brother who is autistic, and the way you described things would have made sense ...
Apr 10, 2010 -
Re: Sneak Peek: "Hate"
It sounds great! It sounded just like one of those teasers that you read on the back of books. You should definitely post it, I'm very interested! PM me when ...
Apr 10, 2010 -
Re: The YWLJ 2010 Volume: On Sale Now!
Is there going to be another one? How do you select people's work?
Apr 9, 2010 -
Re: Jokesters Threat--Chapter 2
Wow. That was creepy--in a good way :). Hi I'm Earthfire! Mostly what I could find were nitpicks, so I'll just talk about those. Just remember to add commas in ...
Apr 9, 2010 -
Re: The Nobodies
Your picture is awesome! How did you do that?
Apr 8, 2010 -
Re: "Escape from Loredaen Hall" Prologue: Poisoned
Wow. This was a really cool beginning. I don't know what to say, because I think Stella got everything, except good job! PM me if you add the rest!
Apr 7, 2010 -
Re: Rain, Summer,and Ice Cream: Chapter One
This looks like a good story. The only thing I would like to comment on is first: paragraphs. When all of your story is in one big chunk, it makes ...
Apr 7, 2010 -
Re: Riptide-chapter 1 please edit :)
Hi, I'm Earthfire! I really liked this story, it grabbed my attention and made me want to read more. A few reminders: remember that ever time a new character speaks, ...
Apr 4, 2010 -
Re: Message in the Stars Part 1
The world wrinkled, sending waves of light across the air like ripples in water. I got knocked to the ground by the force of the push, as did the lantern ...
Mar 28, 2010 -
Re: Five -- Twins
Really interesting so far. I hope you're going to post more of it soon. I couldn't find anything wrong with it, though.
Mar 28, 2010