Earthfire713

This was a really good essay. Great job! :smt001 The only thing that I would suggest is explain the plot of "Othello" at the beginning for those who haven't read ...

Hi, I'm Earthfire. Welcome to YWS! The thing I really liked about this story was how you described things. You were able to put a picture into my mind while ...

Hello! I'm Earthfire and I'll be your reviewer today. First of all, great sentence: I was thirteen years old when I was kidnapped. It catches the reader's attention right away ...

Wow. You are an amazing artist.

Oh, thanks! That was really helpful!

Thanks everyone for the reviews! I'm glad you guys liked it. I'll post more when I have a chance to revise a little.

I've been thinking of entering some short stories of mine in a writing contest (not on here), and I was wondering: if I've already posted them on here, is that ...

You published this? That's awesome!

Hi Junglelover! I'm Earthfire and I'll be your reviewer today. First of all, I would like to suggest that you add a little more description into here. Describe Jessica's feelings ...

Oh my goodness. That was amazing. You did such a great job at building up suspense and letting us see the entire thing through a child's eyes. All that I ...

Wow. This was really good. It sounded just like the narrative in a published book. :smt001 I couldn't really find anything wrong with it, except one thing: “Hold! Hold! A ...

Hi! I'm Earthfire, and I'll be your reviewer today. There are only a few things that I would like to point out: The night was a gentle one by any ...

I love it! You should write a story about them! :smt001

Thank you so much, Aqua! I've been trying to write short stories recently, and this article has been a great help!

Hi KAH! I thought that this was a sad story, especially at the end. The only thing that I did not understand was why did the MC die at the ...