Earthfire713

I'm not ready, but I'm doing it. I did Script Frenzy so this should be fun!

Thanks! I'd like to change the onomatopoeia thud to something different. Any suggestions?

At first I thought it was greed, but now I think it's time. Um...I can't think of anything that's wrong with it. I agree with GryphonFledgling about the rhyming, though. ...

Hi! The only thing I found was when her brother "burbled" something. It just sounds like he's a baby, so could you change that? I love your intense imagery though.

That was such a great story, I almost started to cry. You did so well at describing things through a little kid's eyes and how you felt. I couldn't find ...

This poem is in honor of The Lord of the Rings by J.R.R. Tolkien. I hope it's not plagiarism.

Once there were golden flowers and emerald leaves And elven laughter among the trees The thud of their dancing footsteps Upon the ground Thud, thud, thud... Now all the leaves ...

Hi jojo! This was really good, and I especially love the prologue. Somewhere in the prologue, could you put some indication of who the speaker is?

This was a really good story! It just sounds a little like the Dragonriders of Pern series, but other than that, it's great!