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Thanks a lot! I'm looking forward to applying these edits/comments.

Good start, I definitely want to read more. I like the whole flash-back that covers the back story. You have good broad information that sets up the whole story. John ...

Minimalistic seems fitting. I like what you have but I don't think I'm reading it how you want me to. I felt like there needed to be more pauses in ...

If poetry is what you're going for then maybe you could structure it like poetry. Let poetic lines stand on their own instead of being trapped between sentences.

Nice poem, really good job. I wanted the very last line to be a little different though. Maybe something like this: "I have many facets, like a diamond you see..." ...

It's partly about me. I drew from previous experiences, but my main inspiration was a song by Jack White, "Love Interruption." Analyzing the poem, it's about how you feel after ...