Dynamo

I really need some sort of critic with this, people.

Start it in a seporate thread, this is the discusion thread.

1548 AD Chapter One: Early Childhood “Wake up Honey, breakfast is ready.” Kai slowly got out of bed. He adjusted his eyes to the bright glare of the sun. The ...

So... if everyone has their character posted why don't we start this story, eh?

I agree, this is awsome! And about what you said about being careful what I wish for, I would definitely enjoy seeing myself as one of the main villains in ...

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Kage let out a loud scream of pain as he tried to take a step forward. "Kage!" Viamire grabbed him before he hit the ground. She looked at his leg ...

Name: Niros "Grey" Andaar Race: Human Age: 25 Appearance: Grey hair, blue eyes, always bares a look of calmness no matter the situation, always wears a long hooded Jedi robe ...

I see... continue on.

Agreed.

Ahh... revenge. The catalyst for a good fantasy fiction. Your work is very well thought out. Very nice descriptions. What I would suggest though is after writing a chapter of ...

I'd say that's pretty good for a beginner. I like your use of big words, "grotesque", "unfaltering". That comes from writing poems and songs all the time, am I right? ...

Ah yes... but the story is about priates, is it not? I'm just saying it's a little boring for my tastes. If someone got shot in this chapter it might ...

You have given me a critic, now I am obligated to do the same. That, and it's a pretty good piece of fiction. Well, the only suggestion I have is ...

Too much thinky-thinky, not enough stabby-stabby! That's what being a pirate is all about!