Dynamo

Hey, I remember there being a storybook on YWS about this guy, but it slowly changed to being and adventure/love story between my character and another girl's character. We actually ...

(Just a reminder, the only way you can find Vince is if he finds you first. So don't think about going after him to tell him about this new Guardian ...

9/10 yup

Ryaka placed his hand on Melody's shoulder. "Melody, magic is not a curse. What we practice is a good thing. We only want to use it to help others." She ...

(Wow, this has got to be one of the longest chapters I have ever written for this story. It took me about four or five hours to write. For those ...

Hmm... It's alright. I'd say it was better if I was a little more awake at the moment. It seems like you're rushing into the story a little quick, but ...

8/10 I give it an eight because I asume it should be given that score, even though I know nothing about what's being said.

"I believe we are all safe." Vince told her. Zora put her hand on his shoulder. "Vince, why aren't we going after Joseph?" "We can worry about him later, we ...

OK, I'm just going to stop you for a second. Um, what in the holy name of God possessed you to write this piece of crap? Where's the back story? ...

Karana could hear the starved moans of the zombies as they approached. She knew she couldn't fight them all off, and now that they were in a cave they were ...

Didn't I write in the prologue what his age was? Hmm... maybe I forgot. Anyway, you could say Tylor is anywhere from 17-19 years old, somewhere around those lines. But ...

(While I was writing the fight scene near the end of the chapter, at the time I had absolutely NO idea where I was going with it. All I did ...

6/10 yeah, the FCC takes the fun out of everything.

Chapter 26: “Squall!!!” Everyone saluted to the safe return of their comrades. Tylor could see the happiness in Squall’s eyes when he saw everyone was OK. “Hey, Selphie, Zell, Irvine. ...

(By the way, Tylor's arm is still broken. He'll be out of the cast by chapter 27, though.) Chapter 25: “Don’t give up. You’re the only one who can save ...