Dynamo

You may not use a siren on your bicycle in a national park, but a bell, gong or horn can be used. In fact, it MUST be sounded before passing ...

In one of the first few paragraphs you wrote 'Lance' in every scentence he was mentioned. If you change a few 'Lance's to 'he' or 'him' it'll flow much better, ...

The cave troll was bug, almost the size of a Husk. It lugged around a giant wooden club that could easily crush either of them with one blow. "Luke, get ...

"...kzzt... found... zzzcht... yet..." Asher's ears were picking up the sound of radio transmissions nearby. Because dragons have a much better sense of hearing than humans, similar to dogs, his ...

No one under 16 years of age may work in bowling alleys or shooting galleries in Nova Scotia.

I didn't see anything wrong with it spelling and grammar wise. This is a very good story, and I'm sure your girlfriend would definitly agree. Keep at it.

(I've talked to him, too. If you don't mind it'd be great if you could control his character.)

10/10 Great idea, adding links to your works inside the signature. I think it's very creative.

Luke continued through the tunnels, keeping his ears open for any sign of the enemy. Doubt ate at his mind, he couldn't possibly carry out this mission now that the ...

"It's a little out of my way," Kai admitted as he gathered up his stuff, "but I don't mind." Together they made their way through the crowds of students. On ...

(I checked piepiemann's profile and it says he hasn't been on since the 7th. I guess we're just going to have to wait until he comes back.)

(Hey, I was right! He WAS brainwashed! Hey, writer chick, if you're lost go check out the discussion thread, TNcowgirl made a list of all our characters and specified where ...

In Dartmouth, Nova Scotia, it may still be illegal to allow a chicken to cross a road.

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"Glad to hear it," Kai said. "Can I pick you up at six?" "Six sounds good," Audra said. Kai glanced up at the clocked to check the time. "Lunch is ...