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Dunnskee

  • Short Story » General, General Re: Monster.

    As has been mentioned, you're a tad comma happy in your description, though it was executed well. You've a good writing style, but this story could have been better had ...

    Sep 19, 2008
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Cauliflower and Hand Grenades

    The descriptions were well done, yes, but the narrative style itself was a little bland. The poetic descriptions worked well, but got a little tedious after a while. Still, over ...

    Sep 19, 2008


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