Dunnskee

Thanks. About the comma placement- I think I'll keep it the way it is. The symbolism- the sun meaning something humans strive to attain and hold in their power, true ...

I was tired of this house, its seemingly tangible smell of dank decay, its cracked floorboards under every other step, and the enclosing color of rotten wood. I’d been here ...

Tusker, you've came the closest to interpreting it accurately to the way I planned it out, so thank you. And to Quibbons, there doesn't need to be some obvious plot ...

Fragments done on purpose, for the style but... I did mean to change that bit about the food. I'd noticed it before. Strangely, I got a compliment saying it was ...

Removing it.

Thank you, thank you. A lot of tiny misunderstandings of tone I guess, but my style usually accompanies that. And I never said I wanted only positive reviews. I said ...

I like the fact that it can be interpreted in many ways, just like with the other pieces I've written in similar styles. People don't feel like devoting enough time ...

Thanks for the critique, One. I may enter this in a contest if I get overwhelmingly positive reviews.

I rode each day, and saw the same fields, fish ponds, and farm houses from my seat on the right side of the train each day. I’d told myself I’d ...

As has been mentioned, you're a tad comma happy in your description, though it was executed well. You've a good writing style, but this story could have been better had ...

The descriptions were well done, yes, but the narrative style itself was a little bland. The poetic descriptions worked well, but got a little tedious after a while. Still, over ...

Gotta love copied and pasted, generic welcomes. Where's the personal touch? I love people.

I write a lot of everything. Both poetry and prose, with a little lyric. I read a lot of nonfiction as well as fiction. Keep up with politics and the ...

Anyone from TW should know me. I'm a mod over there with Ducks and such. TW is my home. I spend way too much time there, but I figured I'd ...