Dreamwriter

Hello, my name is Halina. My husband's name is Herold. We live in Hollywood, where we sell hula-hoops.

Okay, your theme was simple enough that its easily understood, and that's a good thing. However, it's too simple. You need to add better descriptions, similies, metaphors, so on and ...

I liked the way you emphasized your own agony so severely, and then a few simple touches take away all the pain. Sometimes it takes the love of others to ...

This poem came off to me as more of a list than anything else. More like you were venting than writing. I didn't completely understand what exactly happened. You need ...

Your back is to me, And I'm imagining happiness on your face. You don't notice I'm there, Forever thinking of you. Can you hear me when I say I love ...

I am not whole. I am missing pieces of life, The things all people should experience. I need a broken heart. No one can truly call themselves human, Unless they ...

She breathed in the scent of the fresh morning air, savoring the crisp feeling of it in her throat, on her eye lids and playfully caressing her cheeks. She longed ...

This is terrific. I'm not usually one for poetry and what not, but this is something that will stick with me. Keep it up. You're doing great.

This was very good. I really liked it! The characters seemed unique, and the story was exciting. But I do have a couple suggestions. First of all, while the story ...

The Caterpillar Fell in Love with the Butterfly Once, in your own back yard, there was a caterpillar. This caterpillar took part in a love story that you were never ...

Jace lay back against the oak’s thick trunk, his legs parallel with the roots that littered the leafy forest floor. There were thick trees everywhere, the moss soft and damp ...

This is a great book! I just finished reading it a few days ago and thought I should recommend it. It's about a girl named Kayla. It's decades into the ...

How many times Will you tell me that you love me, Before I believe you? How long will you wait For your love to be returned, Before you give up ...

I think you're starting out great. But, honestly, what you have here is only a start. You should probably rewrite it. The best way to get a good story going ...

This series is utter brilliance! There is simply no other way to describe it, just brilliant! These books are about a young girl named Sonea, who lives in a world ...