Dreamworx95

A thousand apologies for not getting to this sooner, my dear friend. I've been working super hard on re-writing my prologue so I haven't had a chance to review anything. ...

Just so there's no confusion, the MC is a boy. His name's Dean, hence the title at the top. Thanks, folks. Prologue Dean (Baghdad, Iraq, 2003) The ground outside is ...

Thanks for the reviews, guys. I really appreciate it, and I'll try to return the favor soon. Alex: For your first review, that was a very good one. Thank you ...

Dean (Baghdad, Iraq, 2003) The ground outside was steaming from the heat of the hanging sun. I dared not step out onto the blazing floor barefoot. I slipped on my ...

Thanks for the PM, Clever-boy. There is actually something I'd like to get more reviews on. It's fantasy fiction, it's short (prologue) and I've made some revisions to it. Here's ...

I'm not used to reading things in the second person, so this is a little different for me. I think you pulled it off very well. Writing was flawless. No ...

Hey, Cleverboy. Glad to be back with this story again. Lanterns hung from shop windows giving the night an almost romantic gleam. This sentence doesn't sound right to me. I ...

Thanks Anna, you made some points I didn't even think of. Lol, and yes, Peter swears naturally more than Clover, so that's probably why you weren't used to it. I'll ...

Ugh. Just, ugh, ugh, ugh. I'm not feeling confident about this chapter. Zero confidence. Sigh. I tried to make this not sound stupid, but I don't think I succeeded. Tear ...

Wow, clever-boy, this was really good! It was really easy to get through and also very enjoyable. I'm kind of wondering who this Mintrow character is. He sort of just ...

Hello, Ofir, I'm Worx, and I shall be your reviewer for the day, my liege. ;) The first thing I noticed was the giant block of text in the middle ...

Hey, Meadow! It's Worx! I got tired of being called Dream so I changed my nick-name to Worx. First thing I want to say is it's probably not wise to ...

Hey, Hippie, it's Dream again. I'll be your reviewer for the day. Caution: I'm about to tear this thing to shreds. You have been warned. First thing's first. All the ...

Hey, Meadow! I'm happy to see you've finally found that long-lost inspiration. Pedro was still pacing behind the couch, rubbing his hair. “ Everything Gabrielle? Everything ?” I believe you ...

Hey, Broadway, I'll be your reviewer today. Alright, so I thought this lacked a bit of detail...actually, I thought it lacked a LOT of detail. I read through the whole ...