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Chapter 3 Noora Baghdad, Iraq, 2003 Baba’s voice echoes off the walls as he does his morning prayers. I stand in front of the window, listening to him recite the ...

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Thanks guys for the reviews. I appreciate it. I know this is a long bit of reading, so thanks for sticking with me, and I really appreciate all the gold ...

What exactly is the Book of Truth? I remember reading about it, but was that mentioned already? If so, sorry for being such a lousy reader. I swear I have ...

Nice. I really liked this. But never was it mentioned why the cutthroat wants Caullin's son dead, but I suppose that's for dramatic effect and to keep the readers wondering. ...

Hey Master, :) Finally here. Sorry it took so long. Why they stood in line at the gypsy stall was beyond his comprehension . Comprehension. I don't know, it sounds ...

Thanks to Meadow, Zan, Anna, Master Yoda, Carly and Dele for all the help and encouragement. Chapter 2 Dean (Baghdad, Iraq, 2003) Insomnia. I’ve just recently learned the word. It ...

Zan: Thanks for the critique. I can always count on you for helpful advice. Master Yoda: Coming from you, that is a very high compliment. You've seriously just boosted my ...

And the heart of their focus is an angel, rare and radiant, illumed to beauty with light from within. Illuminated. Wow, this was pretty poetic. Beautifully written, but I think ...

Alright guys, thanks for the reviews. Greatly appreciated. Here is the first chapter. I decided to post them all in the same thread: Chapter One Noora (Everett, Washington, 2009) Green. ...

Well, it certainly took you long enough. Hmph. Gabrielle was staying with us. Those two were stuck to each other like Siamese twins. First I want to say that you ...

Milo loved animals, and figured it would be great fun to help feed and clean them every day. I'd remove the comma after animals. slanted steeply in random places, as ...

Zan - Thanks for the critique. You always encourage me. Carly - I appreciate you taking the time to read this. Thank you for telling me to put this back ...

Hello again, Master. :lol: Bookcases were divided into orderly sections, and were laid out evenly across the library's floor. Take out the comma after "sections". I also don't think "library" ...

Good evening, Master. ;) I thought the beginning paragraph was a very good start. The truth was that Miana, longed for adventure, Take out the comma after Miana. ... climbed ...