Dreamworx95

Creature by Fatima Al-Shemary As soon as I open my eyes, I know that I’m back in the home. I recognize the scum-stained floor and the dingy bathroom walls. I'm ...

Hi Crescent, Great interpretation of the contest idea. You had me hooked from the first paragraph. I love that you chose a personification of one of the seven deadly sins ...

I like the simple look of it. Looks very easy to use.

I loved all of Roald Dahl's books. My favorite would have to be the BFG , or the Witches . Also loved the classic Where the Wild Things Are . ...

I guess it bothers me because I spend some time on another forum where people always give feedback on critiques. I think it builds better connections between members and encourages ...

Hi Priceless, This is well written, but I have to be honest - it feels like Twilight all over again. I see Bella Swan in the main character, especially when ...

I love getting long and thoughtful critiques on my work, and I always make it a habit to thank the critiquers and tell them what I thought about their feedback. ...

Hi Midnight, “Nora, you forgot your lunch!” The sharp voice floated down the street just before said teenager turned the corner towards freedom. I'm not sure about "said teenager" here. ...

Hi McMourning, Turning wildly to each other, they compared straws. Cut "wildly" or maybe just change it to "frantically" - or something like that. "Wildly" doesn't really convey anything. “Size ...

Most of the time, I feel the same way about abortion as the OP. If someone gets raped, then I think it's understandable if they want to get an abortion. ...

Hi JabberHut, I was very impressed at how subtly you worked the prompt into the story. At first, the images didn't make sense to me, but I understood better after ...

Master Yoda, the deed is done. :)

Hi Yoda! I was really excited to read something of yours again, and you did not disappoint. This was very well written and enjoyable. You accomplished a lot in a ...

Not yet. Thanks for asking. For now I'm here to review other writers. :)

Hey Master Yoda! It's been too long. I see you have a green tag now. Looks good on you. Congratulations!