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its a nice poem, but I think it would be better if you didn't have it just detracts from the meaning of the poem.And the problem is the poem is ...

The first line, "What Is" could be tooken out. It is just a destraction, and makes it very nice.If you wanted to keep that in there, have "What Is...What Is ...

different...but still very nice. The only error I found was here: For the life of him, Lord Winneburg could not understand why his son and others spoke to him so ...

In the 4th verse, the last line, "And watch someone’s life drain away", I think would sound better if you had "And watch a life drain away", cause it seems ...

lol, it is kinda different, its a start. I drift away through honey There is music in my ears This sounds pretty, but its one of those lines that is ...

very nice, but I think if you wanted, you could combine some of the lines.Here's kinda an example.Before it was kinda too spread out, and you have too many ands, ...

powerfully sad. It is an amazing poem, even if it is depressing. It really triggers a love for humanity.

good for one of those early morning poems.ROFL!I really liked it!Good Job!

Keep up this great work!

very nice, as everyone else said, you can really visualize it and feel it. Keep up these nice poems, you are really great!

Joe once smelled sushi coming from the toilet. Ann didn't give a potato to Joe, because he was imagining naughty pranks involving bird's poop and underwear. He hated pickles on ...

great! I really enjoyed it, the only thing I would check over is spelling. I saw one or two small grammar errors like this: civilisation-spelt civilization :wink: And also, I ...

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Joe once smelled sushi coming from the toilet. Ann didn't give a potatoe to Joe, because he was imagining about naughty pranks involving bird's poop and

I really think the "Things I think about in the shower" could be taken out. When I see it, I was like "huh?What is that there for?" Then the "When ...