DragonWriter

" you need to know this , and beleive this, You see how they sometime mistreat there own kind, juts because they are diffrent colors. We are differnt species. However, ...

"well , what have I missed. It seems yall do so well without me" she glances at a small peice of the treaty. " have you a job for me?". ...

" actully, that is kinda of what i did." said malria " When i was 15 i ran away from home after my dad had a heart attack, and i ...

Catalinna , in her trusty cat form, appears next to leothero and looks around at all the humans. "man, one liltle cat nap, yall could not wait." wisper's cattalina. grumbles ...

This is great, but in a horiffying and gorish way. I beleive you have done excellent job in the detailing (a tiney too much in the goiriness, but beggers caint ...

you need to get someone to look ovber it, I felt like the end was rushed. YOu allso had a few repeating words and some even missing.

"yes, I am new. His name is thorn" malria said. Her sapphire dragon flew and landed on her shoulder , with his tail affectinately around her neck.

Human name: malria age:19 gender: female powers: wild magic( animal magic) defence: 4 thin dagger, a sword (a sahppire falcon shaped hilt, shows age and worn) has a a thin ...

Catalina walks into the clearing. "what are we doing,"she asks she waits patiantly for the answer.

This Is okay, however, I totally agrre with AmeliaOliver when she saw to WRITE MORE![ I do like how you added a name, though. More to the point, we need ...

I totally agree with both of the previous crits. You need to have sentence veriaty. All your sentances have she, as the begining. Maybe instead of she, put her name. ...

I need to know the weopons that a bodyguard might perfer to were at all times. The body gurd has no price limit and/or restictions. However it has to be ...

I like it, I love it, I want some more of it. This was a great storry. I beleive I am officially addicted to this plot. I disagree with whoever ...

Okay this was umm, a good start. I, umm , well, umm , i am just speechless, which is actually verry rare. How lonbg did you spend on this . ...

I like it . i love it, and want a tylenol for my aching eyes. Tooooooo much storry im sioch a small thred. AHhhhhhhhhhh, stinging eyes. My euies burn. I ...