Doubt

Just noticed the "An Alright Start" pun. :P I've told you what I think about this. Magnificent. Keep it up, pal.

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It sounds very 'generic' to me. No real uniqueness, no stand-out lines. Always i am here for you and will protect you if i can, Never will you be alone ...

Umm... Is it about religion brainwashing people? And knowledge is the power I control And heresy’s a leisurely walk now And who knows if I’m right, I could be wrong ...

It's good. You definately have your own style of poetry. The only thing that I think should be improved on is the description. It's important and there's pretty much no ...

I really like this, especially the first stanza. And then the others are cool cause you switch things around and get new perspectives. It sounds like a hard assignment, and ...

If I had it my way, you'd be my poem. I’d write you beneath bittersweet Willows, weeping for lost Seasons of ripening. And you would flow from my pen Like ...

It was your first birthday, I gave you some skates, and I couldnt wait - for you to use them. Please dont touch the blade Please dont touch the blade ...

Very nice. The rhythm was especially notable. Keep up the good work. Great interperetation of the picture. :thumb:

Gone are the days when we ran along the creek chasing minnows, and turning over countless rocks in the search for crayfish. Gone is the age when paradise was a ...

The rhythm (if it had one) was so weird to me. I loved it. :D

Thank you so much for the comment! Question: Are people on YWS supposed to thank people for commenting? On Deviantart it's extremely rude to not thank somebody, (unless you get ...

To call you, Just to say sorry. Forgive me, In return for a smile. Maybe you can hug me, Or give a kiss. I wouldn’t mind. Stay friends? I wouldn’t ...

Who can make her feel like the most beautiful girl in the room? That's what he's proud of. What deep pools of brown entice her everytime? Only his eyes. Whose ...

Sometimes the things in my head prevent me from getting out of bed, All I want to do is move my feet to the cold spots on my sheets, That ...