DevanEWilliams

I would really appreciate a review on my poem: Thanks so much! ~Devan

Hello there! This poem was very interesting and emotional. The details you use when describing the events really contributes to the reality of the piece. Aside from that, there were ...

I was just writing without a real purpose and this is what came of it. I might fix it later if it's got problems, but this is what I have ...

Hey there! Your story is great, and very emotional, which is what you were aiming at, so good job on that part! Unfortunately, I feel like I was missing some ...

Hello there! Great poem. The way you incorporated the song lyrics in fit it perfectly. They really went with what you were trying to say. One thing that I may ...

Hey there! I think this piece was really emotional, and the interesting point of view it's in makes it more real. I think the Spanish you have in there makes ...

Hello there! I know you said this wasn't finished yet, but I still want to comment on what you have written so far. I love your entirely different perspective you ...

I absolutely love this poem. Your metaphor for what you are struggling with makes perfect sense, and can really be taken several different ways. Two paths along the beach. Your ...

Hello there! I love how light-sounding this story is, especially at the end. You would expect the tensest part of the story to be serious, but you kept the tone ...

As the sun dives into the west, crimson and ablaze, I make my way down a broken road- A frayed and torn ribbon flies beneath my feet; The flaming orange ...

They whisper in the darkness-- In the black, Where open eyes Meet closed, Indistinguishable. They scream in the light When the silence rings-- A dizzying whine, Uncontrollable. They rip open ...

Hey there. I really enjoyed reading this, and so I decided to review it. These types of stories have always been really interesting to me. Yours was creative and insightful. ...

Hello there! First off, I just want to say that I think this would be a lot more pleasant to read if you separated each set of two lines into ...

Hello! This poem is great in how you don't come right out and say what went on, but you are still able to fully understand it. Sometimes, it's better to ...

Hello there! I'm going to review this if you don't mind ;) Let me just start right in with it, I guess, and then I'll get back to my overall ...