DevanEWilliams

This is a lovely story. You did a great job in creating the little brother's character. However, I think that the main character's personality could have been developed just a ...

You once saw the brilliant cerulean skies and white, billowing clouds Forever and endless, stretched before you Like a vast, blank canvas Waiting for a masterpiece to show itself But ...

This is really awesome Hayden! I really like your writing style. Your imagery is really good--I could totally see what was happening as I was reading it. There were a ...

Thanks so much for your feedback! I really didn't know what to expect when I entered this, being new to this site, but I'm excited to write more. Your comments ...

There it was—the most beautiful thing a seven-year-old boy could lay eyes on. It was about as big as the nickel resting in his pocket—that is, if said nickel was ...