DevanEWilliams

I love this so much! It is so hilarious! This is such a great poem I just can't get over it! :D I love the absolute irony that the rhythm ...

I really love the tone that you have established in this. It's perfect for the subject matter. Your rhymes are good and the stanzas are well-divided. Nice Job! One thing ...

Please and thank you!

Hello! Let me just say that my first impression of this was "Oh my...ginormous paragraph." You definitely need to divide this up some to make it easier on the readers. ...

I am entering this in a contest. The idea is to be as subtle as possible. I know it's pretty rough since I JUST finished it, so please please PLEASE ...

Sorry if this isn't in the correct category, I had NO idea where to put it. A beginning A nervous laugh A long walk A pair of hands linked together ...

This poem is incredibly honest and emotional. A little depressing at first, but a solid ending and a very truthful story. A few teeny little things. Mom stands by, impassive, ...

This is a great poem with a wonderful story. The opening really draws the reader in. Love your descriptions. Let me just point out a few things that would make ...

This is such a beautiful piece. Seriously, it's amazing. It's wonderful how well the words flow as you read, and your imagery is fantastic. I hate to be too terribly ...

This is a wonderful poem with a very simple idea that is told in a beautiful way. Really awesome job. However, there are a few places that I felt myself ...

Here I am in the middle of a futile attempt to write something beautiful to place my pencil on paper and put images and emotions to words But in reality ...

Hello and welcome to YWS! I'll get right to it, I suppose. :) This being a short piece, every word has to count and drive the story forward. There is ...

I had no idea which category to put this in since it really could be one of several. Also, the lack of punctuation was intentional. Well here goes. Something new ...

A sort of sad story. This was very well written. I like how you switched points of view to see both sides of what was going on. A couple small ...

Hey! This is really great. Very good imagery, and for the most part your line breaks are perfect. However, one that I found a little weird was this one: I ...