DestinyIsCalling

Chapter 3 is very short, and it may be unclear. Just let me know! Reviews are awesome!!! :D Chapter 3 Stowaway The Lady Freiheit was a large trade ship, sturdily ...

I'm terrible at grammar so forget it. Hi! I love your story! It's very vivid, clear, precise, descriptive... Only a couple of things: 1. Um, how old is Nova? Is ...

It was a brainwave! PURE RANDOMNESS The council of the Dawn was meeting in the small room looking over the Waters of Eternity. They were discussing some very important business. ...

Say "You've caused me so much remorse.I was a BIRD not RHINO or a PENGUIN. Gimme the shoelaces and hand over the beak. We need to clear up some buisness." ...

Alright! Ayïve is back! Oh, and please don't criticize me about the way you spell it. I know what it means, it helps you pronounce it. I took away the ...

So... Good thing: You are using a style of writing I haven't seen recently: a kind of Nancy Drew-fast-forward-adult-science style. It's often used in adult books, in a straightforward, dull ...

So, Chapter 1. Thanks for all the reviews/criticism. Under lots of pressure, I removed almost all of the funky symbols in names. Unless of course you count Ayïve's name, which ...

Ooh! Nice beginning. Actually, great beginning. I am no good at grammar, so I'm sorry, I'll just be reviewing. Great Thing I loved your preface. Besides the fact that it ...

Alright then! So, about the story... Good thing: You have a great idea, a story about torture. The way you wrote it was enough to make me feel freaked out ...

Alright. I'm horrible at grammar, so I'm going to skip just to reviewing. I love you description of the Universe, but it felt overly complicated and dense. When I started ...

Thanks Sakura. And just to say to anybody else who reads this, the Greek letters are just a kind of break in the text, like switching characters and such. Also, ...

Your poem has a good theme and moral, or whatever you want to call it. However, I agree that the rhymes are a little flat and predictable. :lol: I know ...

Wow...I can't really say this cleverly, but, you captured dance perfectly . I dance myself and I can understand what you are trying to say, how each and every movement ...

This is my first post, so sorry for any the way, my book is separated into prologue and part 1 and so on by parts of the day. First we ...

Hi. I go by DestinyIsCalling online, though you can call me just about anything. Except "Pocket Organizer." I'm so tired of hearing that. Anyways, I enjoy READING, writing, READING, dancing, ...