Desire

I'd have to agree with the first reviewer! You have such potential and I can see you growing so much as a writer in the future! This piece really is ...

Thanks so much for an absolutely amazing review!!! I have to hand this in tomorrow so was counting on YWS to review my piece :) To answer you question regarding ...

It was the autumn of eighty-five. Summer had come and gone. Most families like to get away during the summer holidays, but with my parents running the surf and diving ...

This was beautiful. You've emphasized the sadness through the repetition of the words "crying, crying softly". You couldn't have really used any synonym for crying cuz if you used sobbing ...

I like this! well done :)

is this about a romance in October that ended? few grammar errors but I enjoyed it, made me think a little bit :)

A great message! Very good protesting against how "fate" would bound you to living only a certain bit of life when you know that you are capable of so much ...

"And sadly, a song filled with fear." I've used the words "and sadly" to show that the fact that the song is filled with fear is a tragedy because it ...

To: Creative I initially started writing this poem using the word "heart" but replaced it with "song" instead, thought it sounded better and I wanted to create the impression that ...

She was really shot and then then Jesus took a walk with her and that's why she was "out of it"... don't really want to call it a coma because ...

There is a song in this girl, A song filled with music. A song filled with ambition and excitement. And sadly, a song filled with fear. Terror claws at her ...

This piece is filled with truth! There are alot of spelling and grammer mistakes but who cares - you wrote an amazing piece that I thoroughly enjoyed reading - thank ...

This is so beautiful... I love the story that you've told and the imagery in this poem! I don't know what else to say other than WOW, this really was ...

I'd like to give you a good review but am struggling to understand the poem. Maybe it would be easier if I knew who Freudian phalli is... I never did ...

Hahaha this is so cute! Makes me feel like I could eat some "candy corn' (we call it caramel popcorn here is South Africa)!