Derek

Thank you all for your reviews! I have noticed a lot, and I mean it when I say a lot of grammar errors! I'm surprised that I even managed to ...

Wow maegardens. All those were completely by accident and typos. Yikes. Bad ones too. Thanks!

Well, those I would consider optional questions. Things that in the moment doesn't need to be revealed in order to understand what is going on. All those will be explained ...

Chapter 2 The Beginning Anya examined herself in the mirror. She pushed her hair out of her eyes and couldn’t help but think somehow she looked different. Ignoring it she ...

I merged the prologue with chapter 1. :]. Nighttide Chapter 1 Bad Decisions *The words almost lifted off the page as she began to read. She sat on a single ...

As I've said in the past, I love poems that tell us something, give us descriptions of something from a point of view in which we wouldn't usually view it ...

Well it makes me want to read the story. It's a good opener if you are going to make it one. Draws you in, makes you wonder what is going ...

I like this! It was very fun to read. I think the coolest part is how everyone can probably relate to something that you have written up their. I agree ...

The picture is very cool, and I do like the colored version better of your two. I do agree, however, that the black and white that becklw posted is better ...

Ha, this does sounds like a window cleaner. I always like this stuff. If I didn't know you were writing about a window cleaner I would be so confused, but ...

I agree with the person above. I could imagine hearing this in song form, unlike most other lyrics I read. Taylor Swift matches this perfectly! It would be a song ...

I loved this series. I remember pre-ordering and waiting for each book to come out. They fit very nicely together and each one offers something new to the table increasing ...

Really this doesn't belong in this section. Maybe Fiction Discussion and Tips. If you need writing help or advice, ask around. I may not be the best person, but many ...

I enjoyed reading this. Your description skills are quite good. I could really see it in my head as I read and it was a struggle to do so. I ...

Yes you should definitely make it flow better. Right now it's just kind of words put together in a giant paragraph. Even though rhyming isn't necessary for a poem it ...