DeathofaNaturalist

On Failure Sweet morphine of putrid sulphur Desecrating, educating, and, with time, settling. Latching. Anchoring and sailing without movement. Ferries come and go but to no avail- I'll not set ...

What follows is not a retaliation of any sort, just to clear things up. I genuinely didn't like this apart from the general sky imagery. I really thought the rhyming ...

I liked this, though thought it weakened as it went on. First and foremost I think the bulk of it is borderline over-analytical; it sounded as though some of the ...

I'm sorry dad that i couldn't be, (a comma before and after "dad" would work better for the rhythm) all that you expected out of me. ("out of me" doesn't ...

OK........Um not bad, but too short and the rhyming wasn't the best but the theme was good. So basically you have a really good imagination you just need to improve ...

I think I have mixed feelings about this piece. Nice and short, of course, but trying to figure out if it works this way or not. The overall impression I ...

Liked it :) the stanza about the Coke especially- very well described, made me thirsty. Wasn't too mad about the last line- comes across as very direct and basic. And ...

Thank you very much for a kind first reply. I appreciate your compliments and found your criticism constructive. I've particularly taken into account what you said about the word "churns" ...

A good old rant of a poem. Honestly it didn't do much for me, except for the last two stanzas; the image of drenching oneself in water is powerful. Sounds ...

You've got the bones of a good idea here but the way it's put forth comes across as trivial and insincere. Again the bleeding rose image i.e its transaction from ...

This gets better with every read. The use of equivocation gets across the truth about such relationships really well; it's never one constant emotion but that ever-changing "I love you/I ...

The best I have read on this sight so far. Loved it, and related to it. Modern but not in-your-face or poor quality. It's very poignant and touches on existentialism ...

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To Die a Child for John Keats To die a child would be a martyr's death, Burning out in youthful blaze, Free of love, life and shortening breath And fading ...

Although I liked what this poem's about, I liked even more HOW it's about- if you get me. Basically wherever there was a hint of trivialism in the theme or ...