Deathcurrent

Hello to everyone who is a new member! Welcome to one of my favorites sites ever, Young Writer's Society. I hope that you all enjoy it and start to poke ...

Awww... how sweet! I really liked how the door slaps her in the face and his response to it. That's just one the, maybe on most mortifying things that can ...

I can't see anything either, at least at this moment, shiney1! This poem is very heartwarming and very accurate. Well, I think so any way :D If only divorce didn't ...

You know when you have a really great story going, but you can't figure out the names of the characters? I have that problem more often than not. SOOOOOOO.... I ...

Blodwyn glanced around the room from her prison: a suspended bird was amazing that her captor had found a cage that she couldn't just squeeze between the bars to escape. ...

The endless void around me, the rocky smooth and flat ground. And the cave like ceiling. Around me, high cliffs, with glowing red water flowing from cracks and crevices in ...

Awww... I like the title of your poem, The Predictable Poem. Very original, since many poems are like that. I like how you make the second and third line rhyme ...

Nice. I'm excited to read more of your story. The only comment on your writing I have is that at first you said there were only two orderlies. One pushing ...

Wow, very well put together. I was drawn in instantly from the first sentence! Ignore this next bit for a moment, other than trying to figure out what's going on, ...

Chapter 2 Unconscious Satyr 101 “Now we don’t know how long he’ll be out. Sarah and I had knocked him out for a few hours with our voices. But with ...

Nowhere n the Bible does it say that. That’s why everyone is trying to find the Holy Grail to confirm it. That is the exact document that the Church wants ...

Wow, that's brillent. I don't have anything to say other than that I wish it was longer. It's true that you're never out of the woods. That only happens before ...

I agree with TwistedMuffins on how you should format it. It will make it easier to read for sure! I like the poem overall, though you should look for a ...

I'm not asking you to love me. I just want you to forgive My selfish idiocy. I can't get you to believe me When I say, "I'm sorry." I can't ...

I like it! I can hear the music that would go with it. How many times would the chorus repeat? Is this the whole song? If not I hope that ...