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Deanie

Deanie

  • Other Poetry Re: I miss the Rain

    One word: Amazing

    Oct 16, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Memory. (now in stanzas)

    I'm speechless. That was such a deep moving poem. I read it and I knew exactly how you felt. Well, your best friend moved, but for me it was the ...

    Oct 16, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: My Song

    Great poem. I liked how the beginning verse was repeated at the end, it gave it a real nice feel. The flow was great and the only spelling mistake I ...

    Oct 16, 2011
  • Other Re: The Black Sun-my nearly overdue entry for Villains comp

    Very nice description. I have never read The Black Sun, but still I love this writing. I only could noticed two little mistakes: The Black Sun, the call her. I ...

    Oct 16, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: The Happiness of Sadness

    I really loved this poem. At the beginning I was a bit confused with all the metaphors but towards the ending it was a really pretty message. Happiness in sadness. ...

    Oct 16, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: Hope

    This was a really sweet nice poem. I can tell you put effort into it and the message is really nice. It connects with the english lesson I had today ...

    Oct 15, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: Sea and me

    Hmm. Okay this poem was good. I liked how the past was calling to hear and she needed to get back there. Why? I guess we will never know but ...

    Oct 15, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: A Note to the World: We Will Rise.

    Simple and beautiful. A poem worth being written. I love your writing style. Deanie x

    Oct 15, 2011
  • Action/Adventure Short Stories Re: Ced/As Make-out Scene-MAJOR EDITS.

    This version is a lot better than the precious. I like Mr. McCoy much better than Ale. I don't know why, but his name sounds more professional. Deanie x

    Oct 15, 2011
  • Action/Adventure Novels Re: Cedric Coley, Resident Boyfriend of Aslan DaVinchi

    Really good writing. I read the second half before the first half, but now I can understand the story a LOT more. I think your description is perfect and you ...

    Oct 15, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: Forevermore.

    Very sad, descriptive and true poem. Deanie x

    Oct 15, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: Freak

    I really like this poem. A very nice message, and true to many people. I like how you repeat the freak thing. It made your point really clear. And then ...

    Oct 15, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: Greeted by Death with Open Arms

    I liked this poem. It was very serious, with a deep meaning. I didn't like the use of the word till but I guess thats okay. If you used until ...

    Oct 15, 2011
  • Action/Adventure Short Stories Re: Prejudiced Injustice

    I really liked this. I understood it and everything. Although you did give the reader enough information to get across the main idea, understand the relationship between the guys and ...

    Oct 15, 2011
  • Action/Adventure Novels Re: Prologue: Attack on the Safari!!!

    Interesting. I wonder why everyone was fighting over him. This prologue made me wonder what was special about Clay that a mini war can happen over him. I wonder what ...

    Oct 15, 2011


If I have any beliefs about immortality, it is that certain dogs I have known will go to heaven - and very, very few persons.
— James Thurber