Deanie

Simple, short, and really nice. I really like the descriptions in this poem too. I love it just how it is, but it would've been interesting what you might of ...

I really like this poem. I found the last line a bit weird though, about his/her cold insides. Maybe there could of been a better way to finish off the ...

I really like this poem. It is very truthful and I just love the images it paints in my head. I don't think this comment is very useful but that ...

I can understand the story behind it, but to me it sounded much like a song. Especially the last verse, All of her toys and all of her curlsCracking the ...

I like this poem, and it was really cute and the rhyme was good. I think the end should of had a rhyme to finish it all off though and ...

I really like this poem! The rhyme goes well with it and I like how it is some like the sea and then you like the sea. I love how ...

I really like this poem. It was a good idea and a very nice way to approach temptation. But I agree with halogirl4197 make it longer! It was so nice ...

Really simple, and very beautiful. I like how its short but nice, and just words that all concludes to one thing. Great job!

I really like this poem! I really like how it is two people talking and one of them is always repeating what the other person is saying. It's really good. ...

Its nice and light but a little... I don't know, not inspiring? All it is saying is the sun gives light, it was a good try, but I think you ...

First things, I really liked your title, it made me want to read this poem. I think the poem is amazing! I love it. Not much else to say about ...

I really love this poem. It is so sweet and cute. I know this isn't a very helpful comment but I really like your poem! :) Keep writing

In my box I have: A mini chest carved and painted by the Jamaican waters. A necklace intricate and chosen just for me. A shiny pink piggy bank with diamond ...

I really like this poem. It goes really deep and is very emotional. Like the first commenter said about breaking up the lines, I agree that would be good for ...