Davidude

Hello! I liked your story, it was a good scifi tale with a twist, but you can also tell it wasn't intensively planned or revised. no problem with that; I'll ...

Hey, nice work! I'll start by summarizing my thoughts. I was very impressed by the ideas in this piece and the strong main character. I was also impressed by the ...

A few technical things: You change the spelling of ethel to ethil. you spell younger yonger you spell guides guids Alright (as in OK) is not spelt 'All right'. And ...

AAAHHH! nice ending. I liked this. Nice build up of tension throughout. The contrast of normal life and the mystery surrounding the zombies worked well. And you spliced in a ...

Hello, Sakura has covered most technical aspects that I noticed, so I'm going to make some subjective comments. Do with them as you will. I found I related to the ...

I really liked this poem, even if it was a bit dark. It really made me feel the emotions of the main character, because you showed them by describing the ...

Couple of things to add: I'm pretty sure it's aeroplanes, not airplanes or air planes, but maybe thats a UK thing. You wrote "showing of" when i think you meant ...

I'll give my general thoughts first and then move onto individual grammar and spelling issues. I enjoyed this story. the first few lines drew me in; I was immediately presented ...

just noticed some errors in the corrections you got. people starting running... try "people started running", probably just a typo, Furthermore, til is incorrect spelling. Until and till mean the ...

This is very very good. Very professional, I can't believe you're only 15! Finish this off and publish! Ok, maybe i'm getting a bit carried away. I have to say, ...

I found this interesting but confusing, as it did not really make complete sense, especially the green bit. You made me feel dim for missing the joke. Apart from that, ...

A bit long eh? I guess thats fair enough, I'll leave this for now for anyone to read if they feel they can, I'll go and read some other peoples ...

anyone?

It wasn’t morning yet, but Fen knew she had to get up, because John, her ‘boss’, got cranky if she was late for work, as often a boss can be. ...

Hello all, I'm David. I've just started sixth form and have given up english as a subject, but am continuing my writing in my spare time. I hope to be ...