DarknecrosisX

"Eleven!", he calls, I rip up the grass, The traction from the asphalt, I speed off at a sprint. "Turn!", the voice booms again, I curve the corner, My muscles ...

Wow, I was expecting great writing, and I was not dissappointed! This is absoulutely amazing! Now, being me, prepare to be critiqued! 1. I did notice you used a lot ...

Name: Mercury Tyrran Gender: Male Age: 28 Appearance: Spiked blonde hair, deep green eyes, thin stubble. Very masculine in appearance, caucasian, solidly built. Wears a Sanctum Security uniform. An ar

Inside Sanctum 78 a revoloution has begun. The androids have overpowered the human taskforce inside and, although all exits are sealed, are planning their escape, then their uprising. Most humans ...

Name: Wyverus Necrosis Age: 19 Gender: Male Race: Human-Necromancer Appearance: Tall, extremely pale, black hair, crimson red eyes. A long scar across the right side of his jaw, not gothic ...

Wow, this is pretty dark, just how I like it! I liked you used of rhyming couplets but managed to keep it dark and eerie at the same time. Quite ...

I like this. Poetry with high contrasts do. So what i liked: 1. The antonym that the poetry is based around. The calm, sweet blue sky, becoming a harsh, aggresive ...

Howdy! A little storybook I felt like making... For those who like fallout, you'll love this. The main character in this is Mercury Ream, along with his dog Zeus, and ...

Wow, nice use of repetition. Very interesting. I liked how you used plenty of personification, and the the repetition of how 'you dont want to fall in love' and how ...

Very well done, a nice piece of introductive, descriptive writing. I could definitely learn from the amazing dialougue in this! XD Anyway time for a couple of nitpicks... 1. Dialougue. ...

Well done! very good. Me, being picky, has a few critical points about this though... 1. You had so many paragraphs, I feel sorry for that abused enter key! Some ...

P.s i used the TAB button to put spaces between the speakers, but it didn't seem to detect them when i posted it :L.

Very deep in meaning for such a short poem. I am obsessed with poems like this, keep up the good work!

Joel did up his zipper as he made his way from the urinal to the bland, white sink. He splashed water over his face and washed his hands, then studied ...

Hey alec its meeeee! Anyway, the review... Ok, be prepared for a lot of critiscism: Its good. thats about it, no offense but it could do with some work. 1. ...