Darkhalm7_Melissa

I'm agreeing with KJ. You have loads of mistakes. And grammar and rough spots. Please read over and over until you think you've got everything and leave the rest to ...

Finally! It's been way to long wince you wrote poetry girl! Now then, on with the reveiw! I like how you threw in a romantic twist. As well as the ...

Great detail and everything! Can't wait to read the next part! I didn't catch anything, but there might've been a few things at the very beginning... D7M :D

I for one agree with KJ. Not very clear what they pesky kid told on about them. I like your word choice and all. And with the cliffhanger? Love it! ...

Those with the negativity on your repitition wrong. If they dove deeper, they'll find that the repeating added something to it that makes it run smoothly. It's quite nice I ...

So passionate. I love how you string words together so they flow so well. Romantic with a touch of mystery. Love it. D7M

If any errors, everyone else seems to have caught them. I found this very intiguing( excuse me if mis-spelled). Probably because I love the night and the mystery every shadow ...

Hahahaha! At first I didn't even get the point of this. Which I guess is what you were going for. But you still have a few spelling errors! D7M

Coolio! I don't even think I saw a single spelling mistake either! I definately hope to see more work from you! D7M

Short, sweet. Two lines with a whole lot of meaning. That's good. And you're what I'd call a fantastic writer. D7M

AWESOME!!! That was a very touching story Suz! I just loved they romance and slight horror you threw into that! Very dramatic. I can't wait to take a gander at ...

This might be a little confusing but...I was captured by the work I just didn't get it. Um...Maybe you should work on this so it's a little more fluient as ...

Hahahaha! That was a great ending. *snicker* Kay so it's not much to laugh about but still...I thought this was really good... I'll be searching for more of your work, ...

The others have had their say so why not me? I personally thought this was amusing. Very fun. Although the others are right about the mistakes you had but I ...

I thought this was great. It flowed well and such. And although I'm not one for big words, I think I was able to understand what you were getting at. ...