DarkerSarah

Yes, your version sounds better, but I rather like the awkwardness of the original version. It's kind of sporadic because that's the emotion I'm trying to get out of the ...

I liked this a lot. Mostly because of the imagery. I agree somewhat with Incandescence that it is a bit cliche, but poetry in and of itself is cliche I ...

I don't really write poetry, and when I do, it's usually free-form. Here's one I submitted to a couple of summers ago. I hope you enjoy it. I watch you ...

I think you could spice your essay up a little, but, generally it was good. I find it interesting that hanging is legal in Delaware and Washington...I would think that ...

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Firestarter: I liked it, but it wasn't very well written. My thoughts exactly. The plot was fairly good. I mean, the religious history was interesting, but it would have been ...

Hey. I liked this, it just needs some editting, methinks. I really like the way it starts off, the first paragraph, and in McDonald's. Except...if the guy, Adam Shorn, was ...

Aaaah! You need to post more...are you working on it? Because if not, YOU SHOULD BE! No pressure. Haha...no, seriously, take your time, and I appreciate your nice review of ...

It seems we might have been!

Hi, guys! I'm brand spanking new here, even though I've already posted a couple of things. I'm really looking forward to enhancing my writing career here on these boards. I've ...

I am also short, have dark hair, and sport glasses. I also am executive editor of my school paper. It seems as though we've got a little in common. I ...

Hey! I just met you over in chat, and I'm really looking forward to reading some of your stuff! -Sarah

You like to discuss history? Hell, e-mail me and we'll talk all you freaking want about history. I love that crap. Haha. But I'm pretty hard-core Christian, so we'll stay ...

I like it better, now. I'm used to posting in forums, and the other looked a little elementary to me. This is nice. Much more professional. -Sarah