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Re: Final Thoughts
Okay first of all I loved most of the poem... it emits a silent anger something that makes you think again about yourself and what have you been doing... everything ...
Oct 23, 2011 -
Re: Searching for Happiness
Ok first of all I loved the start and I can see the bond between them its beautiful, but the problem is you didn't write much, that is the flaw ...
Oct 23, 2011 -
Re: Another Day Prolouge
The story starts really nicely, i like how he loses all emotion and can feel other peoples emotions still it needs more description of the character and i cant help ...
Oct 23, 2011 -
Re: Change of Heart chapter 1
Its quite a really neat story I loved the real life situation. But its true you should put why here mom is that way and why her father left. The ...
Oct 22, 2011 -
Re: You Lied To Me - Chapter 1
The story starts neatly and has a good sound to it but you need to write more or put more info on the character i didn't know who Dave was ...
Oct 22, 2011 -
Re: The Phantom Two
Im new to this site and this is the first chapter ive read out of anything here, I must say the details you wrote make the reader sink into the ...
Oct 21, 2011