DanielRichard

Sorry for the language/sexual references. Hope this does not offend anyone! Why Nice Guys Finish Last You know whose fault it is? Jane Austin’s. That’s right, Jane Austin. You know ...

Part III: Again, we walked to Carlsbad Caverns from the hotel, but this time Stephanie and I stayed together, along with Jennifer who was more than happy to be the ...

Thank you both so much for your comments! The story is done and (somewhat) polished to my liking, so thank you so much for making it through this far (I ...

The next three days were spent in Santa Fe. The school arranged activities throughout each day. Some of them were more to our interest, such as the mountain biking, and ...

Hi there! Thanks so much for the review and for the welcome! I'm ready to post the next part and I will also be going back and taking a look ...

Author's note: this is a story about adolescence and lost innocence, and I believe it is my version of how childhood idealism falls apart as we grow older. It also ...

I agree with much of what Tenyo said, but I'll add a few things. First, go through and do some basic editing. Change "the waist of Tim" to Tim's waist ...

Indeed it was two words on purpose, hinting that we are all just "bodies" but if you feel it is confusing, I can change it. It is a very common ...

Just one of those random things that's on your mind and eventually forces its way onto paper. I might use it for an intro to a short story. Anyway, I ...

I like this a lot. The texture of it reminds me of the movie Children of Men, if you've ever seen it. Very bleak and desperate, but it shows how ...

Here would be my idea for a plot: A main character who is young, maybe a student, and he loves reading, and is an aspiring writer too. He has a ...

Where did nonfiction go? I can't seem to find the nonfiction area. I had a piece in there and noticed it was gone from my works. I thought maybe it ...

The beginning sounds a bit conceited. People don't usually call themselves an "it couple," and she says they "already do everything perfect." These things would be logical for someone ELSE ...

Hello there. I really liked this. It's simple but elegant. A few errors to correct: It should be beauty not beautifulness; the end should say "this is what Heaven is ...

Thanks for the review! And I'm glad you enjoyed it. That is a very interesting point you bring up about that paragraph. I could easily replace it with something a ...