Dalvor

Hey, very interesting stuff. Makes me think of the movie "The Invisible". A topic I would surely like to delve more into. The idea of being stuck in between Heaven ...

I would first like to say that I enjoyed your story. I feel it was well thought out and you got a good feel for the characters and what they ...

"As he tugged at the blind string, his fingers shook—they were slender and pale, much like the rest of him. From his suit to his gray eyes, he appeared drowsy ...

I won't beat a dead horse with the things people have already said but the points previously brought up are exactly what you need to do. Your sentences are short ...