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I also really liked it- very interesting subject! I like that your use of shorter lines and omition of pronouns gives the poem a sort of snappy, bee-like pace before ...

Thank you very much, Alex! It was originally 'you made your choIce' but I changed it to 'our' during a redraft because I felt it helped to communicate the fact ...

Why? :) I'd like to mention that the last 3 lines are a direct quote from the advert that inspired this piece.

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Hi, I'm new here (obviously). My name's Rachel, I'm 17 and from England. I write poetry mostly, but I'm hoping to get back into writing prose- I just don't have ...