Critiq

This guy is hardcore. Amen. It needs something else, though, like a snowstorm, to make him totally awesome.

I believe atheist and people of faith are completely arrogant... Well, most people don't truly know what they believe, when it comes down to it.

I guess I know what you are talking about. It's a more modern version of the 'teen anxst' story (which is the sole reason I stay away from Romance stories) ...

Catch-22. And they have to be laughing.

I never knew Pinocchio was a fan of circular logic. And by the way, it's opposite day.

Should be interesting, but I still play by the creed that all books are better than their movie adaptions.

I'm definitely into the laid back creative intellectual type. Of course, that doesn't happen very often. At all. Personality is tops, of course, but I generally prefer red/dark hair, and ...

Don't sweat the small stuff to much, though. The most important thing is that the basic structure is good. You don't want to waste time polishing poop.

Jesus wasn't sent down to Earth to fertilize large swaths of land or eliminate plagues, he was sent down to spread the word of god. God can do those things ...

I like this world. You do mean the soda coke... never mind. First of all, we have a little policy on this site that you should try to do 2-3 ...

Emotional impact is usually my answer to this stuff. Good writing makes you 'feel' things, whether its sadness, contempt, horror, or happiness. Of course, all people react to different emotions ...

Something about this just irks me. If you don't take your work seriously, who will, especially in an emotional moment such as this? It works for lighter encounters, of course. ...

Have you read the Divine Comedy? I have a strong feeling you've read the divine comedy. A very strong feeling. Because, basically, this is the Divine Comedy. It has cantos. ...

'Brevity is the soul of wit,' eh? I think you are definitely channeling this. I'm not the best poet here (I despise poetry with a burning passion most days), but ...

Okay, here we go. First off, you have a lot of problems with grammar and vocabulary, which can make this story somewhat hard to comprehend at times. But overall, this ...