Crimsona

Wowsers! This is a truly gripping poem, I'll be honest here and say that usually skim over poems but this one I had to digest properly. The imagery was fantastic ...

Sitting here in the ICT suite of our school. The boys around playing Age or Empires, I was annoyed that they wouldn't let me play, the sexist freaks... :? So ...

I really like this poem. At first I just glanced over it thinking. 'Eech, long poem. Long day, can't be bothered to read.' but then I stopped and read the ...

This looks like a great beginning to me. The msn conversation is a little confusing though. Also maybe explain more about Kit's garden, that part is slightly rushed. Apart from ...

Thank you for your review Shubhi, it was really informative. (: I have been working my way through this chapter and it is almost fully 'de-longsentanceised'. I will certainly take ...

Thanks! :) I've started to write it now, I would post it, but it's review day. I will do soon though. :)

Thanks Kyllorac! :)

When I'm boarding at school and I can't sleep, I usually think about an interesting or embarrassing thing that's happened recently in my life to try and drift off and ...

Redwall. Really dull...

Thanks again Yuri! I have been working on this chapter and will work again to make it as good as possible. Thanks so much for your critique. :D

I really, really do like this poem and enjoyed the simplicity of it. It flowed well and the rhyme was in no way forced. However, like the reviewer above me, ...

Thanks for the thorough review Yuri! You picked up on some very valid points and I'm extremely grateful! :) *starts to edit*

I have to agree with the other two people who have reviewed, that the rhyming and rhythm is very forced. However, I thought that the emotion in this poem was ...

Thanks you two! I will take your critique into account and start working on building up more emotion. :)

Where? Where do I go once I’m Dead? Is it a strange world of black? Do I go to where the blind people See Or the deaf people Hear? Is ...