Crimsona

Thank you Tenyo! I'll start splitting up the chunky paragraphs. :) I have been thinking about putting it into first person for some chapters and now you've said it I ...

Just a bit of a mess really. I'm not really expecting any responses for it, but maybe a bit of critique would be nice. :) "Have fun!" My kiss blows ...

Thanks for the reviews. :)

Here comes another poem from the Crimster. This one sums up what happened to me today. Some may be able to relate to it, others may not. Critique please. Be ...

Aww this is a cute poem. I have no idea what the first comment is talking about, I don't think that you need to 'give away' any more about what's ...

Chapter 4 – The time has come So here we are at last, Chapter Four! Enjoy, and please post your opinions and suggestions. It was a mere few days before ...

Very cute story and made my day. :) Really good apart from the spelling mistakes pointed out by BlondieMissyAngel. Keep writing because this is great! ;) ~Crim

I'm hoping for at least 3. :)

Wow, lovely poem. The simplicity and gentleness of it is superb. I'm not quite sure how the title relates but it's certainly a fantastic poem. ... my face and hands ...

Exhausted from crying, the little girl fell on her knees. Why is she crying? Maybe explain vaigly? The cold snow was piercing into her bare legs, making her shiver. Try ...

This poem reminds me of what happened to a friend of mine. :/ I love you," I whispered, Holding your picture Close to my heart; And I wished on a ...

In my dream I walk along the yellow beach of humanity. I like this opening line, showing not telling is good. :) Each grain of sand is a thought from ...

Oooh, it does sound like a challenge. I'm not quite sure that this belongs in this section of YWS since it's meant for lyrics, but best of luck!

This is a very sweet poem that would definately deserve its place in someones love letter, but it's a little cliche and I have heard pretty similer poems before. Maybe ...

Aw, this is really sweet. I love how you keep the audiance guessing but it all makes sense in the end. Very, very good story, use of imagery and words ...