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  • General Articles Re: Alex

    Hey, so first of all, I really liked it. It was a little bit confusing (I guess because I'm not really used to this form). But here are somethings I ...

    Oct 28, 2011
  • General Articles Re: Divine Drink

    Hey, so I enjoyed the essay, it was really enjoyable to read. I don't breakfast, you know. I'm not really sure what you're trying to say in this sentence. The ...

    Oct 21, 2011
  • General Articles Re: Divine Drink

    Hey, so I enjoyed the essay, it was really enjoyable to read. I don't breakfast, you know. I'm not really sure what you're trying to say in this sentence. The ...

    Oct 21, 2011
  • Romantic Novels Re: The Reason for Rain: Chapter Three

    Hey, so I think this is a very good build up. But, I do think in the next chapter you should introduce the love intrest. The grammar and overall usage ...

    Oct 21, 2011
  • Romantic Short Stories Re: Dancing In The Moonlight

    Hi, to start off, I didn't think it was absolutely terrible, in fact, it was quite memorable. There were some parts where, yeah, it was a little cheesy, but you ...

    Oct 15, 2011
  • Fantasy Novels Re: Sisterhood - Prologue

    I like the beginning of this story, it has a good set up. But in the last paragraph, I would try splitting it into two paragraphs. The grammar is good, ...

    Aug 20, 2011
  • Other Re: Entry for Story Title Contest

    1. Book where D.C. is nuked, the military takes over the government, and a team of undercover black-ops seek and destroy the group that nuked D.C. Name: Seek ‘N Destroy? ...

    Aug 20, 2011
  • Lyrics Re: Over The Wall

    This is really good. I liked how you repeated the lines, to give it more emphasis. There are some places where I would of used a different word, but that's ...

    Aug 20, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: Random...Thanks

    I enjoyed this, but I think you should space out stanza instead of just one huge mass of lines. Also, I think you should add some commas here and there, ...

    Aug 20, 2011
  • Action/Adventure Short Stories Re: An Adventure In A Cave

    I liked this a lot, but there are a few places I'd like to discuss. She had been taking a quiet, moonlit stroll on the sands when it had suddenly ...

    Aug 20, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: The Garden

    I liked this poem, a lot. I didn't find any grammar errors, and they vocabulary you used was pretty good. I liked the kind of eerie essence you had, it ...

    Aug 20, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: Midnight Dance

    This is a really good poem, and I can't write poetry so I really enjoy reading it. And this entertained me. I'm sure you know of pricey pretty places I ...

    Aug 18, 2011
  • Romantic Novels Re: Im Too Young For Love

    I liked it, but I think it needs more of a plot which you could develop. Just this doesn't tell us anything about the characters or really the story at ...

    Aug 18, 2011
  • General Fiction Novels Re: (Needs a Title, Ideas Welcome!) Prologue

    Kiki sat down next to me and put a comforting hand on my bare knee. My bed creaked under the pressure of the extra weight. She turned toward my opened ...

    Aug 16, 2011
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: The Most Awesome Story Ever

    This made me laugh. I liked the humor and the nice message in the end. So, I think I might read some of your other works because you said they ...

    Aug 15, 2011


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