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Sadly in New Zealand there is still no such law - farmers and home owners are taking the law into their own hands, doing their own research and driving sex ...

I Think this is a good framework, it does need more detail though, in places like Jane wakes up in her small bedroom, shuts her alarm off, gets dressed, combs ...

I liked this peice as much as i can like something thats action/ adventure. I had one problem with the story, just something little but its in the beginning so ...

oh dear, sorry about quoting myself, that does make things a little confusing dusn't it... i have learned my lesson, never talk while criting

Great framework but it really needs 'filling out' if its worked right it could be a great novel. Your kow how people say nothing can ever get more worse from ...

Erica watched as the little ripples created by her feet rapidly grew as they spread out into Crystal Creek; a smile spreading across her face as she thought about those ...

I really do love this poem, I think it describes everybody in some way or another and that anybody who reads this can relate to it, everybody has had somebody ...

I really liked the general idea its just a little hard to get them imagary, show don't tell, my english teacher is always quoting that. [/quote]she sang like there were ...

I really like this peice, its a good change from the things i normal write, nothing really i can say to change about it. Just keep doing what your doing, ...

I really loved this piece, it leaves you thinking. I would also love to say something to help you improve it but there is nothing I can say apart from ...

Life, to me it is the dizzying affect you feel during an altercation with a loved one, It is the feeling of the wind, scratching at your clothing, pulling you ...

Really i agree with everybody else, it sounds like somebody's wedding vows (although personally i'd have trouble saything that in front of so many people) it may have more meaning ...

That was great, extreamly powerful stuff. I wish my writing was as good as that!

Wow, that's really all i can say, i've never read a peice like it, once again wow :shock: