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As long as he still considers himself a Kiwi I dont really mind. It doesnt matter how you look, you'll always be the same at heart and he's still turning ...

No...suprise suprise but I'm still pretty new! TPBM has more that 3000 points

wow *singsoffkey* that was really good, I would try and crit it but it's almost midnight and there are trucks thundering through my brain. I'll give it a go in ...

Thanks for the really long and really helpful crit smaur. If you read the second posting you will notice that i have edited the first part, using a lot of ...

OK, hold the phone i Just realised that you are talking about my nine-year-old cousin Summer! Sis, i didnt even know it was you. She is a little monster, take ...

And to think, I was happy playing with poo on a stick and laughing at dead cats when I was nine! Anyway, about the poem it is so cute! and ...

"the cat jumped onto the table" means the cat jumped up to the table "the cat jumped on the table" means (to me) that the cat was on the table, ...

I was never too good at breaking things down, but I think it would be better if you broke the phrases down more by subject. And I think that "I" ...

Emily seems to be deeply disturbed. I promise you, it is only the beginning, I gave one of my friends nightmares because she got so scared of Emily :D Also ...

I've always seen 'onto' as more of an action and 'on' as a place, for example: she turned the radio onto the rock station she turned the radio on the ...

I've always had issues with names, especailly because i have a thing agaisnt 'normal' and simple names (although i must say i do have a soft spot for any female ...

This is the first little part edited and the second page of chapter one. There are about six more pages of this chapter Emily sat at the back of the ...

It was very good, wonderful description. There were just a few small mistakes, typo's probably. If only she could feel wha that girl was feeling again. It was as if ...

Thanks for that, I didnt even notice my little age mistake. She's always been 15 I don't know why i said 14, damn you wandering mind! I'll post the next ...

Heres one that keeps all us bored hostel girls busy Watch Salad Fingers, its so weird!