CraigFrank

Ok thanks! Mind if I let you know once I've made the changes?

Ok, I can definitely add in more about the girl. Could you recommend a particular place where to do so? (I'm worried about infodumping). The transition. To be honest, the ...

I was introducing Janice's name with Sam to show he took the time to learn it, but if that's not come through I'll just take it out. Would it make ...

That's the whole point. She is explaining it in the intro. She also explains other stuff later. She shouldn't be explaining anything. What I and possibly other reviewers mean is ...